Landing on the moon

For the last 5 days or so Ms Williamson's literacy class have been working on a piece of moment in time writing for the first step on the moon. we has to write present tense so as we were in the moment,describe us taking off and landing what they said and everything like that. We also included what we could hear,taste,sound,feel and everything on that list. Some people wrote how it would feel actually on the rocket going up and some wrote about them watching it on TV but in the olden days in 1969.

I found spacing out my writing after feedback a bit hard.
I found my base story and idea easy.
Here is my writing: